Monday, September 29, 2008

Recall Love Lingers

Original Photo by Jamie Parade Can you see the heart?

love moment fleeting
live completely the moment
love for eternity

why are you crying
He said they're in a sleep
meeting you after time

after not fleeting
longing for eternal gate
loving as you wait

wait to be again
knowing it will never be
recall love lingers


stu said...

Again, this is pretty good, but the drive for an almost telegraphic style seems to have cut out a couple of moments of grammar.

Live completely in... a moment? the moment?

Assuming I've guessed what you mean correctly, it's probably also they're only sleeping.

I know this must make me sound like I own a closet stacked with dictionaries and anoraks, but after a point confusion over sense, particularly in such a tight style, can make it sound like the words are falling together randomly. Since you're probably aiming for incisive, that would be a pity.

anthonynorth said...

To me these go from happiness to sadness. Emotions are also so fleeting.
Well said.

Anonymous said...

This strikes as so sad with the fleeting of love.

Deborah Godin said...

Yes, I do see the heart - lovely photo!

SandyCarlson said...

I do recall that love lingers. And I recall love. Thanks for sharing this with OSI.

tumblewords said...

Emotion is certainly fleeting. Nicely done!

qualcosa di bello said...

there is much comfort in your words for those who have lost loved ones...